Introduction
My introduction isn´t finished it is only the beginning….hopefully
Introduction
In common communities or city´s today everybody is acquainted to fences around his or her house or ground. A fence is a symbol for safety and protection or suggests the message to be left out. Actually fences are build with the wish to keep somebody out. Currently a wall, an oversized fence, saves the border from the USA to Mexico. An incredible amount of policemen and members of the Immigration and naturalization Service (INS) support. Creating a huge gated community. When T. Coraghessan Boyle wrote his novel “The Tortilla Curtain” he thought about this situation and reduced it onto a suburb of Los Angeles. In the following I am going to discuss certain questions which came to my mind regarding my research paper topic:”Gated communities in T.C.Boyle´s novel “The Tortilla Curtain””. I tried to start with my research paper but noticed a problem which complicated the start a lot.
What is my question?
August 19, 2009 um 2:37 nachmittags
hey. looks good to me
You do really lots of work in order to create a nice paper!
In my opinion the introduction shows clearly your intention and those few words secude to read more. The only thing I could note is your use of language. Achtually I love the style you write, it’s quite easy to understand and flowing, but I’m afrait that it might be to colloquial for such academic work. Unfortunately I don’t have advises on the hand right now, but I’ll think of them. Promise!!
See you tomorrow
Now I want to work a little more on my stuff ^^
August 19, 2009 um 3:35 nachmittags
Hi there!
The inroduction seems alright to me. It would be nice if you could structure your work accordingly and send your table of contents by email or post it here.
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Wiebker is right, you know, you need a little patience to achieve good results. Just think about how you can apply the theme of the gated communities to the novel, create a mind map or whatever else helps you to structure your thoughts. Then everything should fall into place
Speak soon,
Mrs B.
P.S.: The German template is a little confusing. Took me a while to figure out how to respond…